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Discussion area Terminator The Sarah Connor Chronicles RPG T
Marcel93Date: Monday, 27 Feb 2012, 22:57 | Message # 1
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Can be discussed here, suggestions or the like can be made​​. But I have to ask to stay on topic!

More info as I have dyslexia, my English is very bad, I'm trying to write very well, the written language but I could be a bit confused ^ ^ now because a lot of fun


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chrisdvanneDate: Monday, 27 Feb 2012, 23:10 | Message # 2
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Thanks for taking the time to write (TSCC) fanfiction Marcel!
I have not read your ff so far bit i promess i'll do it later this evening smile


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AlexDate: Tuesday, 28 Feb 2012, 06:00 | Message # 3
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Quote (Marcel93)
Can be discussed here, suggestions or the like can be made​​. But I have to ask to stay on topic!

More info as I have dyslexia, my English is very bad, I'm trying to write very well, the written language but I could be a bit confused ^ ^ now because a lot of fun


Hi Marcel. I had a look at your fan fiction and I greatly admire your effort. I had some trouble following the story but a good edit would probably fix any problems. English is a very difficult language to learn I have been told. One suggestion I can make that may be of help to you is to read a translation of a book that you have read in German. See how the English language is used to tell the story that you read in German. This will help you understand better how to write in English.

This type of comparison could also be done watching an English language film with German subtitles or perhaps the other way around (German with English subtitles). This is another way to get a side by side comparison of the two languages.

Another thing that may help is to draw a time line showing what happens in the story and when. This graphic view of your story outline will help you keep to the story with fewer jumps and gaps. Lastly, get a good dictionary or use an online translation tool.

I hope this helps.


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Marcel93Date: Tuesday, 28 Feb 2012, 18:57 | Message # 4
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Thank you ^ ^ I'm there to my heart, many thanks

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chrisdvanneDate: Tuesday, 28 Feb 2012, 19:27 | Message # 5
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I congratulate you for the effort; writing fanfiction is something that i beyond my abilities.

My comment about your story :

John trip into the future was short! I think it would have lasted only one episode in TSCC season 3.
Also i'm not sure Weaver would have let her "boy" alone in the future but the fact is, John Henry is not restricted by the cordon in the back of his head now.

This list of people Skynet wants to kill, and therefore that the Connors have to protect could have put the bases of a cop procedural serie smile

more soon...


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Marcel93Date: Tuesday, 28 Feb 2012, 21:48 | Message # 6
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Yes that's right, the journey into the future, I have taken very short. Even with John Henry you're right, but it is a time paradox has been created, actually already in the first season since the end of the world in 2003 actually took place, not 2011th John Henry has contact but that will be explained later with itself in 2045 included an additional travel time and therefore got the chip itself to action. Cameron's chip brought back to the year 2027, and took all his running.

This story is set on the third Terminator film and the fourth, hence the appearance of Marcus Wright ^ ^ but I am always open to criticism, and look forward to more ^ ^


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