Can be discussed here, suggestions or the like can be made. But I have to ask to stay on topic!
More info as I have dyslexia, my English is very bad, I'm trying to write very well, the written language but I could be a bit confused ^ ^ now because a lot of fun
Hi Marcel. I had a look at your fan fiction and I greatly admire your effort. I had some trouble following the story but a good edit would probably fix any problems. English is a very difficult language to learn I have been told. One suggestion I can make that may be of help to you is to read a translation of a book that you have read in German. See how the English language is used to tell the story that you read in German. This will help you understand better how to write in English.
This type of comparison could also be done watching an English language film with German subtitles or perhaps the other way around (German with English subtitles). This is another way to get a side by side comparison of the two languages.
Another thing that may help is to draw a time line showing what happens in the story and when. This graphic view of your story outline will help you keep to the story with fewer jumps and gaps. Lastly, get a good dictionary or use an online translation tool.
I hope this helps.