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Summer Glau short story
Date: Sunday, 09 Dec 2012, 03:26 GMT | Message # 1

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Hi everyone! This is a short story I made of the Simon and River scene after the bar fight in the maidenhead when Simon's talking to River about her saying "Miranda"

http://www.wattpad.com/9573547....-squish

I hope you guys like it smile

I added some of my own dialouge smile


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Date: Sunday, 09 Dec 2012, 03:44 GMT | Message # 2

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I hope you all like it smile

And I'm sorry for the grammar errors


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Date: Sunday, 09 Dec 2012, 03:54 GMT | Message # 3

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I enjoyed the story so much I didn't notice the grammar errors. Very good job at weaving new and existing material together.
The relationship between Simon and River was my favorite in Firefly/Serenity. You brought it back home again. Thank you.


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Date: Sunday, 09 Dec 2012, 04:23 GMT | Message # 4

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Thank you smile

I plan do to more. (write more I mean)


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Date: Tuesday, 11 Dec 2012, 03:13 GMT | Message # 5

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no problem smile

River and Simon are awesome!


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Date: Wednesday, 12 Dec 2012, 01:16 GMT | Message # 6

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Good job and good story even if I didn't catch all at 100% but this is because of my translation "English -> French" ^^

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Date: Wednesday, 12 Dec 2012, 04:30 GMT | Message # 7

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Thank you!

I'm sorry it may be because of my grammar but thanks smile


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Date: Wednesday, 12 Dec 2012, 23:53 GMT | Message # 8

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Don't apologize lol it's me, who am not very good at English ^^

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Date: Thursday, 13 Dec 2012, 00:15 GMT | Message # 9

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well done terminatoremily, put together brilliantly the short story, simon and river form a great relationship together always and forever,and deeply true love for his sister, smile
 
 
Date: Thursday, 13 Dec 2012, 00:39 GMT | Message # 10

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I agree River and Simon are so cute!!

Thank you!

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Date: Thursday, 13 Dec 2012, 06:13 GMT | Message # 11

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Quote (TerminatorEmily)
Hi everyone! This is a short story I made of the Simon and River scene after the bar fight in the maidenhead when Simon's talking to River about her saying "Miranda"

http://www.wattpad.com/9573547....-squish

I hope you guys like it smile

I added some of my own dialouge smile


Good work Terminator Emily. I liked the story and I liked what you did to add to the original.

Here are two suggestions:

1. For any dialogue, I think it is a good idea to read it out loud. Get a sense of how it sounds. Perhaps you could ask your friends to read it with you. Then, if there is something a bit awkward or something that does not quite sound right, it will stand out.

2. Write, write, write. The more drafts you write, the better. And read, read, read. Clearly you are already doing this. By reading other writers, a writer will find things out about how to refine and develop their own writing.


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Date: Thursday, 13 Dec 2012, 15:25 GMT | Message # 12

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Here are two suggestions:

1. For any dialogue, I think it is a good idea to read it out loud. Get a sense of how it sounds. Perhaps you could ask your friends to read it with you. Then, if there is something a bit awkward or something that does not quite sound right, it will stand out.

2. Write, write, write. The more drafts you write, the better. And read, read, read. Clearly you are already doing this. By reading other writers, a writer will find things out about how to refine and develop their own writing.
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Thanks for that. smile I'll keep those in mind smile


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Date: Thursday, 13 Dec 2012, 15:26 GMT | Message # 13

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whoops I never meant to quote thank for that nevermind I meant to quote your suggestions whoops! :P

But I'll say it again

Thanks smile


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